An Unexpected Adventure.
She knew that it hadn't been a good idea to leave the tap running but now she was starting to enjoy herself.... then she saw a three eyed sea monster. The sea monster was eating a giant squid. Then the sea monster dived to the bottom of the Mariana Trench with the squids head sticking out his humungous jaws. He was scared because five sperm whales were heading towards him. The whales dissapeared into the deep dark sea chasing the sea monster. The girl watched the sun reflecting off the water, when suddenly half of the squid head popped out of the water. She got such a fright she fell out the bathtub landing head first in the water. The girl woke up on the floor, looked around and said "Whew! It was just a dream."
That is an awesome piece of writing Liam, ka pai. What inspired you to write this, and how long did it take?
ReplyDeleteTino pai Liam !!! I thought the introduction was brilliant .... in fact the whole story was brilliant ... I loved all the detail and you have a fantastic imagination. I can't wait to read your next story
ReplyDeleteWow Liam your writing has really improved what a creative story I really enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteLiam I can tell that you have worked very hard on this piece of writing. I love the way that you are using full stops and capital letters. You have done a great job at making sure you have included some beautiful adjectives like 'humongous'.
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